I have been learning how to put detail and use good vocab in my story. The hard thing was to find high level word’s. The easy part was writing the story because you get to extend your story a lot. I can use punctuation really well. I need to learn to put more higher level words.

Race Day

“On your mark  get set go” the elephantine man yelled in the black microphone. I jumped into the cold aqua sparkly sea. I jumped over the tall thin hurdles seeing the colourful fishes like Clown fish, small fish and big fishes but  my conscience  whispered in my ear “Get in the game you can look at the fishes after when you’re done” My conscience was right I should get in the game because everyone wants to win a medal but my conscience was mean a little bit . So I tried my best and I came first. I was so surprised that I won. I gave a speech “I would like to thank my family who supported me throughout the season thank you thank you”  “You can take my pictures after”.